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EverAfter
Dance
Our love feels like a dance
lost in a hypnotic trance
We do the tango just for two
I know you should lead but I lead you
Neither of us want the music to stop
so I spin you round just like a top
The music changes and we dance real slow
I pull ypu in tight to feel the love that I know
As I close in tighter we begin to lock
and we move in circles just like a clock
The music changes to begin anew
we do the salsa me and you
Our bodies move fiery and hot
I don't need the things that I once sought
The music begins with a smooth melody
I now change loving and full-heartedly
WE begin to waltz at a slow beat
we turn down our steps from salsa heat
I stare deeply into your moonlit eyes
No longer to care about all the lies
Once again the music swaps
We can hear the sparks of ambition as they crackle and pop
...and suddenly...my legs just can't budge
As if it was against me they held a grudge
...Everything stops...people start staring
I try and continue as if I'm not caring
But you stop dead and start to leave
....I can't grasp it I just can not believe!
You grab a new partner and move in tune
The music starts up again soon
I'm left...with no one
And this dance must be done
Nothing...sitting there.... all alone
There's nothing left except for me to go home...


Ieri Aedile
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  • User Comments: [3]
    Very nice. The rhyming is a bit off at parts, and so is the meter, but otherwise it's a very good poem. So sad. emo

    comment The Minister of Death · Community Member · Fri Feb 23, 2007 @ 02:49am
    They just keep getting better! Just as deatshate said, the rhyming and meter is slightly off, but the words are spun so well I hardly noticed. You portrayed the theme of the poem very well. I can't get over how good it is.

    comment Cute n Koi · Community Member · Fri Feb 23, 2007 @ 05:03am
    that was soooooooooo beautiful! heart u have a natural talent. dont let it go to waste....

    comment Fluteberry · Community Member · Sun Mar 11, 2007 @ 11:07pm
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