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EverAfter
Yay oh yay
a friend today
we can go out and play all sorts of games
So I now I here by proclaims'
that that tthis couldn't get any better!
Now I'm slipping and getting wetter
Oh great I'm drowning in a pool
My eyes pop open "Oh god I sound like a fool"
It's been ten long years
Since I heard her voce touch my ears
"This is lame oh I can not believe"
"Is it my heart my mind's tryin to decieve."
I know she is gone
So why won't their shine a new dawn?
She hated me and treated me bad
Yet, it still was the most fun I ever had
Why can't I get her face out of my mind
I just don't need to seeher,please make me blind!
I can't get off of it, there's just no point
I still think our paths are at a joint
My god why won't this shut up and die
Please help me... help me and say good bye!


Ieri Aedile
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  • User Comments: [1]
    I like this one, very realalistic. There are a few spelling errors, but your rhyme scheme is perfect. It has a fairly good beat, but the long statements throw the poem off a bit. Otherwise, this is a great poem.

    comment Cute n Koi · Community Member · Sat Apr 07, 2007 @ 06:50pm
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