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Poem: My Intrepid Soldier
Underneath these piles of postcards,
Crumbled, dirtied, cherished,
You’ll find a compassionate heart: broken, shriveled, perished.
My intrepid soldier walks the line
For a cause, holy enough to be divine.

Underneath these piles of postcards,
Folded, disorganized, saved,
Lays a wild-mustang soul no longer misbehaved.
My intrepid soldier struts, chest proud and high,
His self ready, willing, and able for another persistent try.

Underneath these piles of postcards,
Worn, stained, relieving,
Cries many-a-soldiers over Captain; simply grieving.
My intrepid soldier sits among his comrades,
Acting as a guardian angel, replacing moms and dads.

Underneath these piles of postcards,
Feared, ignored, reread,
Dwells a dying soldier losing his sweet, pretty head.
My intrepid soldier sleeps soundly, ready to give in,
Personality missing, no longer found within.

Underneath these piles of postcards,
Loved, praised, destroyed,
Exists a back, deepening hole producing an endless void.
My intrepid soldier lays underground in a lonesome, buried coffin,
Resting alongside so many other blameless men.

No longer a pile of postcards,
Lost, missing, gone.
A new, just day arises with the renewing crack of dawn.
My intrepid soldier battled with a strong, burning passion,
And he that had fought so well died in the most honorable of all fashions.






User Comments: [1]
ImaLittleEmoGurl
Community Member





Fri Jun 20, 2008 @ 04:21pm


Well, it's not as good as the other three poems before, but that's ok....It's a good poem, the ending is slightly iffy...liek there should be more to it or something....or that very last part "in the most honorable of Fashions" because, I don't know..it seems odd, like that part is out of place and doesn't fit there...it needs a different use of words...I think it's the fashions part that I don't like very much....is death really a fashion? Like an unaviodable trend?


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