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EverAfter
Cat and Mouse
Lost in a simple game
Cat and mouse yet we stay the same
Chasing After me
ANd I turn and do the same to thee
AM I suppose to be happy if all I ever wanted in life...
Comes with a price
ALways seems to be in my grip
But even I know I'm bound to slip,
No light to proceed at the end of the tunnel
ALways half empty and never full
There is no subtle change
Not something new to rearrange
I guess I'll just keep slipping down
forever and ever round and round...-unless
WOnt you be the hand for me
Or be a new light for me to see?


Ieri Aedile
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  • User Comments: [1]
    I liked this one! Very thoughtful and sweet. Although, you break up your rhythm a few times. I am also seeing odd rhyming patterns, actually, the lack of patterns. It was going great until you get to tunnel. All the other words have a corresponding rhyme except tunnel and full. On the plus side, this poem made me smile, so I will give you a bonus for that. I think cute describes this poem the best.

    comment Cute n Koi · Community Member · Fri Feb 16, 2007 @ 05:05am
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