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My story
This explains the story of myself and how I came to be myself. But sometimes it might have random pictures that I like in it.
Chapter 3 My Hero
"Now don't fret Rose." Pepsi said as she walked toward me. "No one is to harm you, in fact, right now no one knows where you are, except for those who are loyal to He." "Yes," the girl in the blue dress put her hand on my shoulder. "if anyone of the rebelion knew about you being here" "Shut up! You are not to mention those rebeliouse tratitors in front of Rose." Said the girl in pink. "But you just did!" The girl in blue said in her defense. "Yes, but that was just to make you shut up." Said the girl in yellow. "Will all of you just shut up! He will be here in no time, our orders are just to make sure no one bothers Rose, and you three must be bothering her, because your bothering me too!" Pepsi sent them into the kitchen area to get some snacks. "Now that they are gone Rose, I must tell you something very important." Pepsi began to whisper something into my ear when two bottles smashed threw the windows. Pepsi looked shocked and began to scream for the three to come help her. The bottles then exploded filling the room with smoke. Everyone began to cough and no one could get a word out of their mouth. I looked to the door thinking I might be able to excape if I got the chance, when the door came crashing open. Standing in the doorway was a figure. I couldn't see the figure's face as the light behind them shadowed them completely. The figure ran in and before I knew what was happening, I was grabbed and was now being held in arms. I was blinded for a moment, by the suddenness of light. Then I looked around and relized I was being carried off by someone. I coughed some more then looked up into the face of my rescuer. He had long black flowing hair, his eyes were red, and he had a scowl on his face. He was wearing a black trenchcoat with a white undershirt, and he had dirty grey pants on.
<img src="file:///C:/My%20Documents/My%20Pictures/7b3392d6193842.png">He was looking foward as he ran til I finished coughing. "Who are you? Where are you takeing me?" I asked him now holding on to his shoulder. He ignored me and kept looking foward as he ran, I moved my hand off his shoulder. Now, I was no longer sure if I was saved, or in more danger then I was before.
My note: Sorry to end chapter three there, but I want to keep everyone in suspense for chapter four, which I will write tomorrow.






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pepsi114
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commentCommented on: Mon Mar 28, 2005 @ 10:33pm
you sure got me in suspense!
(is the rescuer Jintei? i think this b/c he comented on your first chapter after me! and his character matches the discription!)


commentCommented on: Mon Mar 28, 2005 @ 11:14pm
Very cute, and suspensful. I'm a bit confused though. You might try to shorten it into smaller paragraphs (its easier on the eyes.) You use good imagery. By the way, read my journal if you're up to it. I'm writing a story too. I welcome comments. blaugh Keep up the good work wink



Sanguvixen
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