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story about what happens to naruto when he come back age:15 Naruto has come back to Konoha after his first mission,when he got back form his training (mission was to rescue Gaara,that part was really in the comic)(he finds out about his next mission,which is to follow the akatski to find the secret lair of orochimaru and sasuke)this story takes place in the middle.but he has a relaxing time for this.and this story takes place there. As Naruto is going to go get Ramen he spots something out of the corner of his eye.he keeps walking.then he sees it again out of his other eye.But he doesn't stop.then just as it leaves the corner of his eye going to the other eye he stops and turns around. "Hinata,what are you doing?"Naruto says.he looks at her blushing and looking like she is scared. "would you like to go get some miso ramen with me?"(he is still completly clueless that she likes him) hinata replies,"I'm s-s-sorry Naruto-kun,s-s-sure I will." They make their way onto the Ramen shop,Naruto pays for the ramen and suddenly Hinata faints. "Hinata,Hianata,Naruto yells.but She lies unconscious. to be continued....unless I get a low score. http://s19.photobucket.com/albums/b178/For-All-Things-Fluffy/Naruto%202/Hinata/?action=view&current=naruto-282-18.png this story has been cancelled

Posted by: mark of fire Fri Jun 16, 2006 @ 09:18pm

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mark of fire
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Commented on: Fri Jun 16, 2006 @ 09:38pm

Commented on: Fri Jun 16, 2006 @ 09:44pm


	Some advice: Expand your vocabulary and use of words, couldn't you say something else instead of, "And they keep walking, they walk here, and there." Oh, and you spelled Miso wrong XD I don't like to give ratings -_-

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Commented on: Fri Jun 16, 2006 @ 11:14pm


	i could give you my story but seeing as when its writen its 170 somethin pages you would be reading a long time but anyway i give you a 5 just because everything sudden lol

Commented on: Sat Jun 17, 2006 @ 02:10am


	um.. i don't want to be too mean... so.. i'll give you a 7.. you need to be slower in everythin' like mine is easy goin'.. you know? ^__^ hope u continue!