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My uber crappy story (concrit please xP)

Posted by: `A m o n . l ` i s a ` Sat Dec 31, 2005 @ 07:01am

死ぬ気になれば何んでもできる。

RIP Charlie ~ Pet dog since 1995

In my world, reality takes a vacation once every two weeks.

恋は頭でする事ではなく心でする事だ。

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Brain Akazariua.
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Commented on: Sat Dec 31, 2005 @ 05:25pm


	I like it. just keep practicing and you'll become a great writer someday 3nodding

Commented on: Sun Jan 01, 2006 @ 09:57pm

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Commented on: Mon Jan 02, 2006 @ 05:04am


	j00 write like Sada. ^^ -nod- veeery sad Aura. Or is it Sierra... :neeja: I'm guessing it's the REAL and ORIGINAl Aura 'cos Sierra would just post it onto the Writer's Forum with her own account... ahem Mm...very deep and sad. Although...maybe loved was a little too strong since you're referring to a male dog. Maybe 'devoted'. Or something. One other thing-with eclipses...you don't need a capital after them. Like you wrote: 'Always there with you...Always there...' It should have been: 'Always there with you...always there...' Ya know? ^^; Other than that, it was uberly spiffeh. It really does sound like something your seester would write... :super neenja: Keep writing Aura! ~Elaeye

Commented on: Mon Jan 02, 2006 @ 09:02am


	I have an addiction to capslock xDD~ thanks n__n edit devoted sounds too long xP

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Commented on: Fri Jan 20, 2006 @ 07:41pm


	Yay, a sad story for once! Call me weird, but I feel like a sad story leaves the reader wanting more closure, thus allowing them to formulate their own ideas after they read your last line. For me, this is one of the most powerful tools ever, and I use it quite often. To this day, I have only one story that ends on a happy, hopeful note, and that is the short story I'm working on right now--The Tower. Well-written and it cuts to the chase. I like it. smile

Commented on: Sat Jan 21, 2006 @ 01:08pm


	thanks for the comment. Ooo I'll go read the story

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Commented on: Mon Jan 23, 2006 @ 03:27am


	Wow...that was really powerful...I want to go down and hug and kiss my doggies now! I find that if you read this story out loud as if you are the dog...it is extremly effective! I really loved it! Please if you write more let me read!

Commented on: Mon Jan 23, 2006 @ 06:52am

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Commented on: Wed Aug 16, 2006 @ 12:47pm

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