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Here's another poem I wrote...called Daughter Please comment

Black waves crashing on the white sand seashore.
She gazes at the water from the cliffs, thinking, I can't take this anymore.
The water beckonds.
She takes but a second.
Then she hears her name.
But, she thinks, it's all the same.
Everybody hates her.
Nobody loves her.
She takes another step closer...another step closer to death.
White puffs eminate in the night air from her warm breath.
She hears her name another time.
She turns around just in time.
She sees her mother, tears in her eyes.
Her hand reached out towads her hopeless daughter and tries.
Tries to coax her back.
Back to her loving home, back on track.
As she heads back to her mother, she slips and falls off the edge.
She reaches hopelessly towards her mother shouting for her in tears, decending down, out of sight the ledge.
Her mother cries, as her daughter hits the water.
The blackness surrounds, dead, is her daughter.


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  • User Comments: [4]
    HOW DO YOU DO IT?! XD
    I Cannot write anythign that rhymes with such skill!
    It's Awesome, I mean, EXCELLENT!!! *cheesy guitar solo*
    I love it
    and uhm..is the inspiration perhaps Shiri?
    just wondering. :3
    I missssssss yoooooou
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    comment -Her Babbit- · Community Member · Sat Mar 22, 2008 @ 02:32am
    ='D why thank you =D
    Hmmm...actually I'm not sure what my inspiration was...I just kinda wrote it. XD
    Truthfully, in the RP with the shore and everything...it was AFTER I wrote this poem...so I suppose the poem inspired Shiri... hmm.

    comment Othello_ollehtO · Community Member · Mon Mar 24, 2008 @ 11:52pm
    Your very welcome. ^-^
    It's an awesome poem!
    I think I'll share it with my L.A. teacher, if you don't mind..
    copyright infringement, maybe? >_<
    :O
    ooooh this was before the tragic and uber dramatic moonlit shore scene, hm?
    Well, i definitely saw some connections to Shiri and the poem, but it may not have been what you were intending. Human minds work funkily @_@
    And speaking of the tragic and uber dramatic moonlit shore scene, we still haven't finsihed it! :O
    I misssed you todaaaay!!! TT^TT TT^TT TT^TT
    I'll be on tomorrow ((Tuesday >_< it's 12:58 on Monday for me.))
    And check your PM inbox. 3nodding
    I also saw your comment on my poem! =D
    Don't lie, it sucks XD
    I made a better version in math on some scratch paper but I lost it in my backpack.
    >_< I lose alot of things in there.
    I found a tub of rotten cheese there earlier this year O.o
    Well, goodnight llama-ai-chan. ^-^
    Hope you had sweet dreams. *cough*aboutacertainsomeone>.>*cough*
    I'll be dreaming of you. ^^
    *hugs tightly*
    -Ju-Ju
    heart

    comment -Her Babbit- · Community Member · Tue Mar 25, 2008 @ 08:07am
    Copy writed.
    XD wow i forgot all you wrote.
    so i'm just gonna nod my head XD 3nodding
    lol, yesh we do have to finish the scene!

    comment Othello_ollehtO · Community Member · Wed Mar 26, 2008 @ 12:23am
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