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I am dead for them , im newborn for you .............
River Boys
Two mens walking in the woods , two old friends.
one is named Mark , the other Rick.
They walked until they meet a small river , too short too cross with a boat , but the water current was too strong too cross by swimming.

Rick tries to cross it but the current caught him , he knocks his head on a stone.
Lucky Rick , the current brought him close enough to the edge for Mark to grab his uncouncious body.
Rick wakes , he then started to act like he was scared.
Mark said :"You hit your head pretty hard , maybe its a sequel."
Rick stayed quiet.

Mark proposes :"Lets make a bridge!"
Rick says :"It would break...."
Mark then replied :"No , im sure it will work!"
Rick says :" No it will break , we wont be able to find wood strong enough!"
Mark says : "ok....."

They start thinking bout a way to cross this river.
They heard that , on the other side of the river , was something we can only see once in a lifetime. Something incredible and unique.

Everytime Mark proposed an idea , Rick was aigainst it.
"Maybe that hit screwed his brain a bit" Mark thought.
He kept giving ideas. None passed.

All were mentioned , bridges , ropes , blocking the river , go around , jump ,but none passed Rick`s judgement.

Then Mark got angry , and shout after his friend.
"Why are you so stuborn!! If we dont try , we`ll never get passed!!!" Mark said.
"I tell you , we cant cross this river , i know why , but i cant tell you" replied Rick.
"Whats on the other side then? Tell me!"
"I cant , you wouldnt believe me!! Ill tell you if you cross the river!!"
"Ok then!"

Mark then jumped in river and started to swim like a maniac.
He caught a tree`s root and he pulled himself out on the other side.
He made it at last , really exausted though.

He looked around and noticed , Rick was missing!
"Maybe he left back home , loser."
Our young boy started to walk along the little rock road.

Then started to cough and gasps for air.
He felt weak and he fell on the ground and start crying of pain.
He felt like he was going to disapear.

Then , in the single last breath of life he heard Rick talking
"haaaa..... Mark you always been so stuborn , and so determined. This is the last time youl see this world of yours , today.....................we both died.
You see , this rock havent just harmed my brain , it also killed me.
What you retrived earlier was my corpse , the person with whom you talked was my spirit. And now that you crossed the river of life. You`re coming with me to the other world..........
"

--end--


""Life passes fast , it current cannot be stopped.
If you try to conturn it , you`ll forget about all good things of it.""


Plitera
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  • User Comments: [3]
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    Red only if you didnt understand story)



    This story costed me a day of my life.
    I wished you peaple could enjoy it hidden senses but i guess only i will know it

    To most peaple this story will look like this
    "two mens want to cross a river , one dies in it , the other go across and live"
    BUT ITS NOT!!!!

    its more
    a river can be seen as something going one way and fast ----------------life!
    As Rick died by crossing it
    Mark also did , but he just got on the other side , which symbolised death.
    He crossed life.
    And now hes goin to hell........
    If Mark had listened to his friend`s spirit , who knew that mark was gonna die if he crossed , mark would have lived.
    but he prefered to live his life than to conturn it
    such a metaphor i know
    sorry for the difficulties it may have given you.

    comment Plitera · Community Member · Sun Feb 24, 2008 @ 02:41am
    wow this is really good the river was basically the fine line btween life and death and cuz he crossed he died too

    comment eyes that paralyze · Community Member · Mon Feb 25, 2008 @ 05:28pm
    this is a good story

    comment princessyiyo · Community Member · Sun Mar 02, 2008 @ 02:42am
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