Hey evryone this is the first paragraph if you like it leave me a comment and give me a rating if i get enough good ones ill put more in here so farive got about three or four chapters but i need to know if you guys like it
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we come upon a small cave, inside a young man lies sleeping; a guitar lay beside him in the shape of an axe. Suddenly wide awake he jumps to his feet alert and ready. He sniffs the air as he picks up his guitar and slings it over his shoulder, eyes shifting cautiously as he buckles the guitar holster strap. he stretches and yawns a sleepy sigh of relief, a chilled gust of wind freezes him mid-stretch. he slowly cracked open an eye only to find himself completely surrounded. strange, cat-like creatures with tall muscular bodies, striking slanted yellow eyes, large cat ears, and all completely black from head to heel (they had no toes). no form of clothing was worn by these creatures for they had nothing to cover. the young man showed no sign of fear as he stared down the creature nearest him
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