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A flower in the river,
Flowing silently.
There may be waves,
but the flower will move on.
It may lead to a waterfall,
or even to the shore,
But the flower will never know its future,
on the silent river.
- Title: ~Silent River~
- Artist: AshMearii
- Description: I made this so others will see life like I do. =) You are the flower. The river is life. The waves are problems. The waterfall and shore are the path you will take. I know it's pretty epic xD
- Date: 10/17/2010
- Tags: silent river poem ashmearii
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Comments (6 Comments)
- AshMearii - 11/07/2010
- Thank you! ^^
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- Torleep v1 - 11/07/2010
- The river flows on regardless of the flower's issues or choices, and it's a really terrific metaphor for life. This could certainly be expanded upon (i.e. where the river ends, the flower meeting other flowers, etc.) but what you did with it was good. The only thing I think should be changed is the first bit. It almost seems as though it's the flower that is flowing silently, which doesn't make sense. That's just my opinion though. Bravo smile
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- AshMearii - 10/17/2010
- thnx ^^
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- BokenDoll13 - 10/17/2010
- nice choice of comparison! i like it alot.
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