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Aah!
I remember
When I was but a seed
Roamin’ the land as I pleased
‘Til the Hand scooped me little self
And buried me in bleak and black
Curse the Hand that cast me away!
And all I remembered was dark and dull
‘Til I felt worms wrigglin’ from me mouth
Roots and leaves and more green came out
I felt me growin’ and soon I glimpsed
The butterflies and breeze of bright and blue
Yes, good times, good times!
I remember me awe and me thirst for more
I was a wee tree but wee all the same
And beauty was all I saw ‘til winter came
The breeze was no friend and no birds sang
And I was afraid I would die again
Thank goodness for the Hand!
I remember the twig he tied at me side
And many springs and winters past
Each ring was I stronger than the last
Me fruits flourished, some ripe, some rotten
And me leaves were there and now no more
Hahaha!
Now, I am old
I was told
And stories
And shade
Are all I’m good for
But, look!
‘Tis the Hand’s Fruit with a new twig
Roarin’ and hungry
Are me rings up already?
---Grrr---
Now I remember
---Grrrrrr---
They called me Tree
---Grrrrrrrrr---
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- Title: They Called Me Tree
- Artist: MihlleT
- Description: Imagine a crazy, old guy telling a story about his past. God, or whoever, put him in where he thought was hell. He had no idea that it was the only way for him to grow. Then, at the prime of his life, he enjoys everything the world could offer...and still wants some more. Then, in times of hardships, God, or whoever would help him out. In the end, God's creation, humans, of course, destroyed what was left of him.
- Date: 10/09/2010
- Tags: they called tree
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Comments (4 Comments)
- MihlleT - 10/10/2010
- Uh. Thanks Jack. Appreciate it.
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- NakedJack - 10/09/2010
- I'm not sure if what I said is accurate anymore, but you should work on your tenses in this poem. If it is just now remembering being called a tree, then why does it say tree through out the poem? If this is taking place at different times, then what does it say, 'But, look!' instead of just, 'Look!'. Still very good poem, just needs to be polished to perfection.
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- NakedJack - 10/09/2010
- '. . . but a tree all the same' 'I cursed the hand that cast me away' As this was the past, and he understands now what happened. Or does he still recent the hands? 'All I remember was the dark, and dull' You don't need the 'And' at the star, and he remembers, not remembered, I guess. This is a very enjoyable poem to read, happy, hopeful, thanks for writing it. Double check it for similar mistakes as mentioned.
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