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Your single sounds of monophony,
Are much too sad and very lonely.
Your lonely tunes are much too pronely,
To dysphony and cacophony.
Your many tones of polyphony,
Are very sweet but one thing only-
Your pronely sounds are still too lonely,
For euphony and oxyphony.
Your melodic tunes of symphony,
Are played together quite beautifully,
And then when you're speaking musically,
You know what it means to be -phony.
- by Wheres the Corn |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 04/05/2010 |
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Wheres the Corn - 04/06/2010
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I know, I have noticed that I do actually use a lot of commas, whether it be poetry or prose. I'm trying to work on my use of punctuation.
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- Scarlet_Teardrops - 04/06/2010
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For example: Your melodic tunes of symphony, are played together quite beautifully.
You don't need a comma after symphony. The end of the line automatically indicated a pause in the reading, if that is how you want it to be. Instead, you would write it:
Your melodic tunes of symphony
Are played together quite beautifully.
And yes, you should probably put a period after beautifully. Or a semi-colon. Your choice. - Report As Spam
- Scarlet_Teardrops - 04/06/2010
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Hmm...
I like this poem. If you were not using the words as a theme, I would suggest that you change some of them so that others may know what you're talking about. But I think this is pretty good as it stands now.
You do use a lot of commas. In fact, you use too many and you put them where they don't belong. - Report As Spam
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