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tab Shadows in the Dark v.1
The smattering of chaos rain
Shall be the order of our strain
Rising rhythm of a cup on the bars
Prisoners all to the cacophony of fallen stars
And no transgressions shall be on our feet
When the righteous blood spilt is mete
Brothers in arms, held by a strangle
Demons with chains, knowing their angle
All and blind remember and witness lights in the firm stark
None seeing the forgotten shadows in the dark
tab Shadows in the Dark v.2
Love, forget-me-not
Remember at least the things we’d got
Darting far and wild
Laying on grass, fair and mild
A kiss on the cheek, lips on your hands
A few words in the air, drifting like strands
Holding close, our challenge the devil shall hark
Held fast by what was offered the night we ran as shadows in the dark
- Title: Shadows in the Dark
- Artist: FilipStiq
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Description:
The original I had written, VERY dark. MAN, I wish I could read these aloud to the people who read it... You could say it's about conspiracy.
The second version is about love enduring past what all the others might say - whether they are friends or gossiping bystanders. - Date: 07/22/2009
- Tags: shadows dark conspiracy couplets chaos
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Comments (2 Comments)
- FilipStiq - 07/26/2009
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Really??? Cuz with this one I just totally let it flow. I didn't do any scheme really on purpose, it just came out this way; I wrote it with a concussion, that's probably why it sounds weird. Whenever I do have a scheme, I just tear it apart by the end and do whatever the heck I want to contrast the former order with absolute chaos.
Sorry for rambling and THANK YOU SO MUCH for rating/commenting/being nice!
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- Intrepid Indigo - 07/26/2009
- I liked it but (given this same advice sooo many times today) don't compromise your message and words to mantain a rhyme schemem. It was a good poem but at times the phrasing was akward. 4/5
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