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The sky is clear;
Not a cloud in sight.
The sun shines
Distant but strong.
Swirling leaves
Silently reach the ground.
It is a very
Peaceful day.
Suddenly
Like the sound of a gunshot,
Thunder strikes.
Storm clouds appear
Rapidly getting
Larger and darker.
Rain shoots down--
An army of bullets
Attacking
The unsuspecting victims.
The leaves that had been
Flying so freely
Now drown
In the puddles of water.
The sun that had been
Shining so brightly
Now are nowhere
In sight.
But just as suddenly
As they appeared,
The clouds vanish.
The thunder stops.
The rain disappears.
The leaves miraculously
Come back to life.
The sun
Glowing up high.
And once again
With the clear, blue sky
It is a
Peaceful day.

- Title: A Peaceful Day
- Artist: Fl0ria
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Description:
Bleh this is just a quick poem that took maybe 15 minutes...
I'm not in college or anything, so I'm not that good at this. xP - Date: 05/10/2009
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Comments (2 Comments)
- Fl0ria - 04/05/2010
- Thank you for the suggestions ^^ I think those are good ideas, actually. : D
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- Eluft - 09/04/2009
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Very nice!
I have a few suggestions, if you don't mind. I would make "like the sound of a gunshot" (line 9) its own line, as well as "rapidly getting" (line 11). I would also join "Peaceful day" (final line) to the line before it. These are just things that came to my mind, but please do or do not do whatever you want. - Report As Spam