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Betrayal— the hurt never goes away
Like a song, it plays
On your emotions,
With peaks and downs.
High up, staring at a gaping trench,
While standing in the crisp, fresh grass
With my friend.
I step closer, amazed at it.
Seems it would go on forever.
I turn around to tell her this
And am stabbed in the heart.
Cruelly, evil grin ruling her face,
She twists the knife,
Agonizing pain.
From her push, I fall backwards.
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I go, trench walls flying past.
Red is all I can see,
The red of searing pain,
Blind rage,
Murderous hate.
I curse at her as I fall,
Trying to get a grip of the slippery walls.
She turns a deaf ear to my violent screams,
And yells after me, to shatter my reality
"You were never worthy of me!
I was never truly your friend!
I never cared about you!"
Black surrounding me, I cry in desperation,
Anger, sadness, separation.
Slowly, thinly, my fury starts to fade.
Then, I do realize what had happened.
Still falling, maybe I'll never stop.
Nothing around me but the suffocating black.
BAM!
I hit rock bottom,
Injured, wounded,
Broken.
Empty anger tries to overrun me,
But hurt and anguish paired up with
A smoldering rage and crushing despair
Are all I can feel.
Lying on unforgiving stone,
I break out in sobs, all alone.
In sobs of despair, fury, hate,
Loneliness, hopelessness, and terrible pain.
Will I die here?
Will I ever escape?
After most of the hysteria has past
And my eyes have run out of tears,
I rise up, attempt to stand.
Pain washes over me, from all my wounds.
I stumble, biting back a cry
And clutch the knife, still sticking from my chest.
I brace myself for the coming hurt
And pull, pull, pull.
Bloodcurdling screams tear from my throat as I drag it out,
Blood gushing over my trembling hands.
All I can feel, all I can think is
My agony, and the cause, through the anguished haze.
The knife is out, I fall to my knees.
Ragged gasps burst out of my heaving chest.
Blood everywhere, blood all over me.
I recover a bit, but forever scarred,
Learning, in the world's cruel way,
That in order to survive, I must rely upon me.
Needing to get out,
Needing to leave,
I gather all my strength,
And scale the wall.
And on that note, I promise myself
I will not let her win.
I will survive this shattering blow.
I will truly live.
- by elizacookie |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 05/07/2009 |
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- Title: Broken
- Artist: elizacookie
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Description:
Not my best work, perhaps.
Just venting my blow when my "best friend" decided we weren't friends in a text. When I tried to talk, she "didn't want to exchange words on such an angry topic." So, when she brushed me off the next day, indifferent to any pain she caused me, fury raged. Especially when, 2 weeks ago, I had to console her for over a week about the loss of her best friend's friendship.
So, yes, venting.
As always, please comment. I love all criticism, good, bad or otherwise. - Date: 05/07/2009
- Tags: broken hurt indifference rage
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Comments (6 Comments)
- Ellectric Eccentric - 05/16/2009
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holey crab cakes batman!! I think it's sad how your not lying, see really did send you that text, and deny liking you at all (just so other people know that this really happened). I give it a 5, and you know that's really hard for me, because you depicted so accurately the situation we were in.
she broke my heart to,
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- Cottoncandyocbra3 - 05/12/2009
- Not bad. Seems you fancy more optical conceptual poetics than actual substance (although said work isn't bereft of substance). For a venting and furious post, this is oddly focused and strong within the realms of imagery. It does delve slightly into adage, or colloquial cliche, but never in a meandering or uninteresting manner. Quite the solid writing, friend. I shall be perusing your other works. 4/5.
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- justamanda325 - 05/09/2009
- thants reallyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy good! (do i have to add more y's to tell you how good it is?)
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- Jemp10 - 05/07/2009
- HOLY ******** s**t!! THATS SO ******** AWSOME!! IMMA TOTALLY PUT THAT ON MY MYSPACE!!!!!!!! THATS SOOOOOO ******** INCREDIBLE =)
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