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Some days I wonder if the Sun would keep shining
Others I wonder if the rain will keep pouring
In this little place called home
There is only rain or shine
Never snow or fall
When I see the Sun
It glares at my eyes
When I see the rain
It falls on my cheeks
When I couldn't see I fell
When it was wet I slipped
If the Sun went away
I wouldn't have to fall again
If there were no more rain
I wouldn't have to slip again
But i'd never learn to pick myself up
If I always went straight
I'd never go in a new direction
If I never changed plans
Life would be boring
So when the Sun shines
I'll look straight up and let it glare at my eyes
And when it pours
I'll let it rain on me
Sometimes in life
Just saying is so simple
We say we will pick ourselves up when we fall
We say we will not look back and keep moving forward
But what if one day where light no longer shines on us
And rain no longer falls on me
In this dark dry world
Can we see which is up or down
Can we know if that is where we must go
We look down when we know we have done wrong
But why not look up and face what we get
That way
The Sun will keep shining on us
THe rain will keep pouring o us
And we'll always know which way to go
- by BabiixDevil |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 03/26/2009 |
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- Title: Rain or shine
- Artist: BabiixDevil
- Description: Its kinda cheesy and lame..but er...don't be too critical and maybe you'd get what i'm going at.^^
- Date: 03/26/2009
- Tags: rain shine
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Mockhiel - 03/28/2009
- love it and I agree with Rocko this is real poetry 5/5 from me
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- rocko11091 - 03/26/2009
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Concept: 5/5 (i would reallygive it higher...it would be 10/5)
Flow: 4/5 (flows well...but not perfectly)
Style: 5/5 (within convention but shows originality)
Fig. Lang./Imagery: 4/5
Overall: 4.5/5 (5)....congrats on a poem well written - Report As Spam
- rocko11091 - 03/26/2009
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wow *raises eyebrows* now this is poetry....no offence to other authors/poets here, but this is real poetry right here....
as far as criticism, i have little...it really is quite good without any changes, but it might have room for some figurative language or a bit more imagery....everything else about it is great....i like what i see here.... scoring on next comment... - Report As Spam