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WAR MEANS death……,
WAR MEANS destruction……,
WAR MEANS fire……,
WAR MEANS bombing…..,
WAR MEANS sorrow…..
WAR MEANS turmoil…..,
WAR MEANS tears……,
WAR MEANS guns…..,
WAR MEANS blood…...,
WAR MEANS confusion….,
WAR MEANS explosions…..,
WAR MEANS mutilation……,
WAR MEANS sickness……,
WAR MEANS killing…..,
WAR MEANS occupation…..,
WAR MEANS loss……,
And lots more……,
But after one side…..,
Or the other side…..,
Has finally had enough….,
And lays down their arms
To surrender and give up…..,
WAR MEANS PEACE….! ! !
- Title: War or peace??
- Artist: mse6
- Description: About War in the World and it needs to be stopped
- Date: 03/23/2009
- Tags: peace
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Comments (2 Comments)
- HamanoKumiko - 04/05/2010
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As I was reading it, I was thinking...'Oh nice, using repetition to draw in the readers attention, a little abused though....' but when I got to this line, "And lots more……, " No, just no. It sounds too...mediocre.
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- Sunafire - 03/29/2009
- Very political and true, but you could have added more to the first stanza (Paragraph) to give it a bit of body, and make it less repetitive.
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