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money on my mind money is all i think of
i comein out dragon mouth ******** out the water
house right out ur mother house what the
******** u talkin about u even getin money so ******** u i got alot of money even ur
famliy cant ******** with me money on mind ******** what u talkin about
- by kash flows |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 03/21/2009 |
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- Title: get money
- Artist: kash flows
- Description: haters not getin money
- Date: 03/21/2009
- Tags: money
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Comments (2 Comments)
- rocko11091 - 03/22/2009
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i hate to be mean when constructively criticizing someones work but seriously?...ok...criticism...
no major rhyme scheme, one example of imagery, no figurative language, non-existent flow/rhythm, not even sure how to interpret the style....
Concept: 0/5
Flow: 1/5
Style: 1/5
Figurative Lang./Imagery: 0/5
Overall: .5/5 (1) ...dont quite know how someone can get that low short of misinterpretting the preceding submission as poetry of any kind....*shakes his head* srry kid....not good enough.. - Report As Spam
- Tracker Ninja - 03/21/2009
- Proper grammar and less F-bombs would make this a lot better
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