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Species Die
Mountains Fall
Oceans fade
But I’ll stand by you through it all
I’ll look ahead for you
Unfaltering my gaze
Holding Your hand tightly in mine
I’ll guide you through these darkened days
In this dark cave
I will be your light
I will lead you through to dawn
And break this endless night
I’ll battle your demons
If you allow me
Your battles could be our battles
But your trust is the key
I am your angel
Sent here to protect
If you love and believe in me
All the darkness that hunts you, I will deflect
I’ll hold you close
And dry your eyes
I’ll give you my world
And tell you no lies
Nothing will harm you
This I swear
Your soul is fragile
So I'll handle with care
I am your guardian
All your worries and sorrows I can see
You are my innocent that I must save
So drop your walls, and let me
- by XxErotic_LeprosyxX |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 02/16/2009 |
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- Title: Maki's Poem
- Artist: XxErotic_LeprosyxX
- Description: Well, i wrote this for one of my bestest friends. it didnt take that long. and im in sort of a bet with him. got this out of my journal, so enjoy i guess idk....
- Date: 02/16/2009
- Tags: makis poem
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Renata Of the Volturi - 04/14/2009
- I love it its descriptive and flow pretty well!!!! 5 shny stars and thanks for commenting on my poem and thanks for giving some tips
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- Gravetye - 02/17/2009
- Although, if you want an actual critique, I guess you could work on meter. That's usually my standard suggestion, haha. Parts of the poem seem to flow pretty nicely meter wise, but than others...don't. Usually the stanzas with the longer lines.
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- Gravetye - 02/17/2009
- So, from your thread in the Writer's forum, I expecting something with atrocious grammar. But this is pretty decent, grammar wise. The topic is a little cliche--you know, the whole idea of standing by someone no matter what--but it's a nice topic regardless. So overall, this poem is okay. Not my favorite, but not something that I'm going to pour over with critiquing, either. Good job!
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