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Your walking down the hall,
No friends to call,
I see you groan,
Your all alone,
Or so you think,
So focoused I can't Blink,
This isn't a game,
I softly call your name,
But when you turn around,
I cannot be found,
I heart you as you see,
Can't it just be you and me,
It hurts when i think about you
do you feel the same way to?
your sweet,loving, and kind,
So why can't you be mine?
So be on alert wahmbulance
Know it will always hurt
my heart tore
I know we'll be best friends forever more sweatdrop
- by DarkStarz42 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 01/24/2009 |
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- Title: Just Friend
- Artist: DarkStarz42
- Description: this is a poem i wrote for a guy who likes me and i like him too but we are best friends wit the same people so we know that we can never tell anyone that we <3 eachother cuz it will hurt our friends
- Date: 01/24/2009
- Tags: love hearts sadness
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Miilae - 10/11/2009
- I like the idea of the poem however you do need to work on the rhythm. Try not to put so many syllables in to each line and Onionio is right about the emoticons. They do make it look a little less passionate.
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- onionio - 01/26/2009
- I’ll try not to be biased, because I personally don’t care of poetry about this topic. I suggest that you not use emoticons if you want to be taken seriously. I liked your style, but the rhythm could use some work. Good effort anyway.
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