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so soft yet so rough.
that the skin of you my love touches me and sooths me
in my time of pain, sorrow, and misery.
yet the love form youisthe remedy to my poison which ales me.
to the point that i cant bare to take it anymore.
and the kindness that emits form you.
is the thing that keeps me sane.
and it battles the things in the night
that scare me.
- by angeldemuerto |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 11/29/2008 |
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- Title: protective love
- Artist: angeldemuerto
- Description: my first attempt at poetry and this arena thing so give me some feedback peace
- Date: 11/29/2008
- Tags: portective love
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Scarletgreen - 02/23/2009
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It's good. Very visual.
It may be more powerful with a bit of more base.
You can't really get a grip on it.
Like a bar of soap dropped in jail,
you really don't want to pick it up.
Understand?
Work on it. - Report As Spam
- mexicantacos2003 - 12/30/2008
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it's okay.
almost cliched but not in its entirety....??
no scheme or rhyme but that isn't much important
and it touches you a little.....just a little. - Report As Spam
- 14evilninjacats - 12/01/2008
- Beautiful!
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