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I think about him day and night,
He looks so tall and tender.
I feel he's the only one who understands me,
but we'll never be together.
I lay on my bed dreaming about him,
his breath soothing my neck.
His tender arms wrapped around me,
his soft chest on my back.
I wonder what will happen,
if i let my feelings show,
will he accept me?
Or simply tell me no,
I see him every lesson,
he just gives me a wink,
Am i too young, unacceptable,
I can't even drink.
If he knew how i felt about him,
would he love me back?
or will it just simply feel,
like a shoe up my a** crack?
I want to feel his body,
Lying there right next to mine.
I want to feel his precious lips,
Press right next to me.
I don't know why it takes so long,
am i just a waste of time?
i want us to be together.
Is it such a crime?
by Ruffrider
13 years old.
- by ruffrider16 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 11/24/2008 |
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- Title: Why Is it a crime?
- Artist: ruffrider16
- Description: it is a sad love story i was thinking about after i read a sad story about two lovers. :( can people give me some constructive criticism because i would like some advise. BTW it is ma grannies 90th birthday today! hip hip hooray! i just thought ill add that.
- Date: 11/24/2008
- Tags: crime
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Comments (7 Comments)
- ruffrider16 - 11/30/2008
- nah i got it from jacqueline wilson's book "Love Lessons"
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- Little Raven Girl - 11/29/2008
- ok, so this reminds me of the book vampire academy. is that the story you got it from? anyway, i like it! and the whole a** crack thing made me laugh! 5/5
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- i will be a hokage - 11/26/2008
- *smiles at story 1000000000000/5
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- ruffrider16 - 11/25/2008
- yeah well, i forgot to edit it and thank you for the advise
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- iResell - 11/24/2008
- I do not like the language in it....It is explicit....I really thing it ruined the poem..I'm giving you a 5/5 becuase I like it but that part was uneeded.
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- Megthatsme24 - 11/24/2008
- This is really good. You need to work on grammer though. Capatilize your 'I's and the beggining of sentences. Its a shame when good poetry is ruined by bad grammer. Besides that you show some talent, esspesially for such a young age!
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