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Shattered and broken,
Dipped in steel,
I did not know,
I'd become a meal.
My heart was yours,
You took it, no deal.
Shattered and broken,
Dipped in steel.
- by xTheWiltedRosex |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 10/13/2008 |
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- Title: dipped in steel
- Artist: xTheWiltedRosex
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- Date: 10/13/2008
- Tags: sorrow
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Comments (7 Comments)
- mexicantacos2003 - 10/16/2008
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i guess now that people understand it they will rate it better
i didnt need an explanation but thanks for giving one.
it all starts and ends the same way.
and all you need is the right combination of a few words to describe your feelings.
love it i gave it a 5 because its probably one of the best poems in Gaia...(i mean seriously, have you guys read any GOOD poems besides this one?? if so please share) - Report As Spam
- xTheWiltedRosex - 10/15/2008
- this poem is about an abused and broken heart that was never mended and became shielded from everything. even the good in life.
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- lilli1220 - 10/15/2008
- this is ok but what is dipped in steel supposed to represent anything?
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- dratina92 - 10/14/2008
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what is the significance of "dipped in steel"?
4/5 - Report As Spam
- mexicantacos2003 - 10/14/2008
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bery gut.
very awesome nice use of repetition just like the guy before me said.
the only thing i dont like is that i just know someone is gonna rip your style off and call it their own. and that pisses me off.
oh well 5 - Report As Spam
- Dreamsinner - 10/13/2008
- I like the repetition, the way you end the poem with the beginning. It seems like the speaker is recollecting his/her shattered dreams or heart and piecing them back together with the steel. But i feel sorrow, because it sounds like the speaker will be jaded forever now.
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- lapstreet - 10/13/2008
- i like it comment on mine urs is really cool seems like feelings broken and never recovered
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