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I sleep upon these clouds, so high.
I'm not willing to come down, and why?
Well, for one, thing the world is so cruel today,
All I want to do is relax my whole day away.
Why must I, to the worlds' tune bend?
Why must I have to make these people "friends"?
Why must I be encumbered with their hate?
Why must I? Because it is your fate?
I sleep upon this cloud not willing to wake,
I shall lie here until someone comes who can relate.
I will not move, for this worlds' fate to be death,
Death in which I would like to cheat.
So I sleep here upon this cloud so high,
Just day dreaming about the sky.
- by Poetic_Indulgence |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 10/13/2008 |
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- Title: Clouds
- Artist: Poetic_Indulgence
- Description: Just a short little poem, it's no my best nor is it my worst. It is just a little something I'd like to be judged on. It is about a person who would like to stay in there dream world. Someone who'd like to keep themselves seprate from the world, if you will. Read it and maybe but your own meaning to it, I hope you like it.
- Date: 10/13/2008
- Tags: clouds
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Angel_Death_Dreamer - 10/14/2008
- I lOvE iT
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- Ivanae - 10/13/2008
- wow nice job ^^
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- witty_lilith - 10/13/2008
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that was awsome ^-^
i think everyone can relate to that poem at some point in their life... - Report As Spam
- KatrinaCookies - 10/13/2008
- That was awesome ^-^ Good luck
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- Take care always - 10/13/2008
- Awesome Ivana.
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- Zelda 1005 - 10/13/2008
- This poem is beautiful. Your poem is awesome! smile
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- OceanBreathesSalty - 10/13/2008
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The rhymes you use are weak, and seem forced. Rhyming isn't everything, don't sacrafice a good idea just to rhyme.
"for this worlds' fate to be death" remove "to"
there = their.
That is all, keep writing! - Report As Spam
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