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What is this game you play?
This strange dance,
Your masquerade.
You come to me with a mask of an angel
You're oh so kind and just as gentle.
You tell me things I want to hear
You sing sweet songs in my ear.
Then you switch to another mask.
The change is smooth and oh so fast.
You've become a demon of the darkest kind.
You lie and sneak and confuse my mind.
But these are both masks
A part you play,
In this dangerous game,
Your masquerade.
So who are you really?
What's behind the mask?
A demon?
An angel?
or something else?
Please, who are you?
Why won't you tell me?
I'm tired of this game,
The dance has worn me out.
This masquerade is over,
It's time to find out!
- by I_live_in_illusens |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/18/2008 |
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- Title: Your Masquerade
- Artist: I_live_in_illusens
- Description: This is a poem I wrote about a guy who I really like but wasn't quit sure how to figure out how he felt about me or what side of him I should pay attention to.
- Date: 07/18/2008
- Tags: masquerade love confusion
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Comments (7 Comments)
- I_live_in_illusens - 12/20/2008
- Thank you guys for the constructive criticisms (except Lady in bouen) I know I have a lot of work to do before anything I write is perfect, and I appreciate your comments
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- B-B-B-BeanCup - 12/17/2008
- It would have been cooler if you had actually written this as a metaphor, you know, tried to use images and subtlety to convey your point instead of just outright telling me. I know it's a fine line between subtle and convoluted, but you're a little too far on the "HERE IS THE THEME GUYS" edge.
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- Broken_Soul_Torn_Mind - 07/18/2008
- I like it, but you kinda slack in the middle. Beginning's great, though.
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- lady in bouen - 07/18/2008
- omg bor fest
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- sakanaya - 07/18/2008
- 2/5: Rhyming scheme is inconsistent, you should choose to either use the same rhyming pattern throughout the poem or not rhyme at all. Good work, keep writing.
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- AquadeVida-227 - 07/18/2008
- this is good! if you left out the last four lines, it would be better.
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- Latina_Bebe24 - 07/18/2008
- its good but a nono to the end starting from really to find out
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