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I watch the world with eyes far too old
The time that passes, it never stops
The lives that touch, the stories unfold
One in a million, what do I matter?
I see the world with eyes far too old
The love in his actions, he was mistaken
The hate in her eyes, she misunderstood
One in a million, you think they’d listen?
The world passes by
Too vast for one to be known
Too fast for one to set it right
One in a million, what do I matter?
- by CajunStrange |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/16/2008 |
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- Title: Old Eyes
- Artist: CajunStrange
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Description:
Alright, I'm not sure of this, and I know it's not perfect. I'm not even sure that half of it is right, but I'm trying to get an unbiased opinion. It's based on watching the breakup between my best friend and her boyfriend, it was a mess and the stories weren't straight. I would love to have feedback. It's not exactly a poem, but I'm not sure what this kind of...art (I suppose) is called...
*sigh* I've already gotten mixed feedback, ideas and help are very much welcome. - Date: 07/16/2008
- Tags: love eyes hope possibilities
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Comments (2 Comments)
- Ichigos_bride - 02/14/2009
- its actualy pretty good, i like it, i give it a 5/5
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- vanjoy - 07/16/2008
- its pretty good but the ¨What do i matter¨ part doesnt really make sense, you should try to rephrase that, with that i give you a 4/5
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