- when i saw you again in school my heart started to beat and beat i can feel my heart and how its in so much pain so sometime i just want you to know i love you so much i cant help it but you will never get that . my love is not the best but it true . you act like you dont care what happen between us all the time you say you love me more than anything in the world and how i believed you . i just miss calling you my caveman my TAK && my everything . sometime i wish why cant we just start all over again because this to much pain for me i just can handle this anymore ! i love you and i hope you know that - by Lisa :] aka me :] lol hope yall liked it comment and rate please thank you :]
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- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 03/31/2009 |
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- Title: feelings
- Artist: drama_lover101
- Description: love </3
- Date: 03/31/2009
- Tags: feelings
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Comments (7 Comments)
- complete abnormality - 01/17/2011
- none of my poems ryhme and I asure u my spelling out side of my poems is no where near good but idc as long as I can understand it, while still sounding swell is good enough 4 me/aslo this could aslo be lyrics guy keep that in mind
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- Kechero-TheForsakenRose - 09/20/2010
- It's not so much a poem as a lot of lamenting and questions bundled up without enough periods, and commas. It's lovely, in the sense that it's true and full of emotion, which poetry sadly lacks now a days. However, it's not for this section of the arena. Thank you for sharing this, darling. <3
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- pyro leader 666 - 07/02/2010
- words cannot describe how good that was
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- Julian` - 04/09/2010
- although ....your in the wrong arena
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- Julian` - 04/09/2010
- i know that situation and it sucks...true or not...im not a jerk and i wont rate you on spelling i tae you on your experience or how you make the reader feel you are experienced...4/5
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- thomulus - 04/04/2010
- I agree with jyrolyn, like how long did it take you to write this up? 5 minutes? Did you even read it a second time to check for grammar? You used i instead of I at least 10 times. No effort
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- jyrolyn - 03/27/2010
- sure, all the girls who posted comments love it, but me, well I think poems that dont rhyme can be truly awesome, (iv'e written some too) but regardless, this writing is just... well, it's lazy. loads of spelling errors to.
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