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tab "Come on Link," said Zelda. Link and Zelda were exploring the castle. He was looking outside the window. It was a sunny day and the sky was clear. They went outside to the practice battlegrounds. The grass was soft and green. Some targets were still and some were moving to make it difficult. Today, he is letting Zelda borrow his bow and arrow. He was watching her trying to hit a target, after missing 3 times he nodded his head and took her forearm and led her to the direction where the target was. Once he showed it to Zelda, she let it go and hit the middle of the target. She smiled at Link and ran to him and and hugged him. They fell into the green grass and looked up in the sky and started to laugh.
tab Meanwhile, at another dimension, Toon Link was visiting Toon Zelda(or Tetra). She waved hi and Toon Link entered the castle. Zelda joined him in Linebeck's ship. He bowed and said, "Hello Princess Zelda. Where do you want to go now?" Oh Linebeck! Just call me Tetra remember. We are friends, you don't have to call me Princess Zelda,"said Tetra. Linebeck was embarrassed and said, "Oh yeah. Sorry Tetra. Sometimes i forget about that." Celia flew next to Linebeck and laughed, "You are just trying to be friendly to Tetra because she is a powerful ruler and you don't want to be kicked in the butt!" She started to giggle and they all went inside the ship.
tab Moments later Zelda, Link, Toon Link, Tetra and the rest of them didn't see the dark clouds yet. I wonder what's coming?

- Title: Link and Zelda dimensions
- Artist: Zelda147
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Description:
My fan-fiction of Legend of Zelda.
Main Characters:
Link Zelda
Toon Link
Toon Zelda/ Tetra Co-Stars:Impa Linebeck Navi Celia Midna The Ocean King Linebeck
Featured enimes: Ganondorf and Bellum
Part 2 is out! - Date: 09/12/2009
- Tags: happened zelda link
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Comments (3 Comments)
- The Grooster - 09/18/2009
- I agree with sacred_blad64 but still I know where this story is going and I know I'm gonna love the storyline smile I say 5/5 right now I only rate on grammar mistakes if it's really, really bad.
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- Zelda147 - 09/16/2009
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I am a beginner, and i am still practicing. Please be patient with my mistakes and i usually fix it ASAP.
thx for pointing that out! - Report As Spam
- sacred_blade64 - 09/16/2009
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Watch your verb tense. You switched between past and present a few times. Your formatting also needs a lot of work. You should have a space between your paragraphs so they are easier to read and each piece of dialog needs a new line.
As for the story, I have absolutely no idea what is going on. This is too short to give the reader any gist of the plot, and what is here seems to jump around randomly. Right now, you don't have enough to make your readers want to read more. - Report As Spam